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Post by Sleepless♥Rose on Jul 1, 2006 20:27:23 GMT -5
My personal favorite... of my own... [shadow=red,left,300]The Carousel[/shadow] The music puts them in a trance
With sparkling eyes, they come to dance
To waste the day away,
With sun-kissed faces
And untied shoelaces
They’d come here to play.
A fantasy land, as seen through their eyes
Whirling, twirling under clear blue skies
As if in a dream,
Up and down
And round and round
Shining in a sunbeam.
Illuminated in the light of childish innocence they’d play
Hour after hour, day after day
But time cannot be stopped,
Time passed
Imagination cracked
They had decided to grow up.
No longer could the music play
The cottonball clouds turned to gray
The magic had been lost,
The dream broken
No longer it motion
Covered with vines and moss.
Forgotten… year-by-year would pass
Only seen through eyes of glass
They hold the secret, but cannot tell,
They’ve all grown up
They’ve all forgot
Their once-living dream, The Carousel
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Post by I <3...you...no...probably not on Jul 1, 2006 21:31:04 GMT -5
Today Today my life can be corrected, today my heart avenged, the broken shards of life i collected, away from my insanity i edged,
he saved me from my self, he carried through the dark, my anger he put on a shelf, my heart he healed no longer stark,
his eyes so warm full of joy, mine so cold and gray full of hurt, one touch he healed no longer coy, i thought and hoped we'd never part,
then he left me without a last look, my scarred heart finally collapsed my fragile spirit grew dim, i shut myself up closed like book, i hide my sorrow behind a mask of immorality all because of him,
Never will my heart settle never will it stir, Ever changing never differing, always will it move always will it stay, no one can enter, no one can leave.
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Post by I <3...you...no...probably not on Jul 1, 2006 21:33:03 GMT -5
i cant get the verses just right...suggestions would be appreciated
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Post by Sleepless♥Rose on Jul 1, 2006 21:34:36 GMT -5
Whoa... that's good... YOU WROTE THAT!!!!? If you don't mind... i'm going to move it to it's own thread...
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Post by I <3...you...no...probably not on Jul 1, 2006 21:41:16 GMT -5
ok...i dont like the 2nd and third verses though...or the 4th really...actually i just added the fourth like 2 minutes ago...
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Post by Sleepless♥Rose on Jul 3, 2006 10:54:24 GMT -5
the rhyme in the fourth verse doesn't flow as well as the rest... maybe if you:
then he left me without a last look, my scarred heart collapsed; my spirit grew dim, i shut myself up, closed like book, Hiding sorrow behind a mask of immorality all because of him.
... it gets the same point accross... I just re-arranged some words...
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Post by I <3...you...no...probably not on Jul 3, 2006 21:20:34 GMT -5
better...but not right yet...i'll keep workin' on it...thanx
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